<span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-family: Times; font-size: 14px; line-height: 20px; "><p><span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: 19px; "><font class="Apple-style-span" face="Helvetica"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: normal; "><span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: 19px; font-family: Arial; "><span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: normal; "><font class="Apple-style-span" face="Helvetica"><font class="Apple-style-span" size="4"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-size: 14px; "><span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: 19px; "><font class="Apple-style-span" face="Helvetica"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: normal; "><font class="Apple-style-span" size="4"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-size: 14px; ">"加上上半段<span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: 19px; "><font class="Apple-style-span" face="Helvetica"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: normal; "><span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: 19px; font-family: Arial; "><span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: normal; "><font class="Apple-style-span" face="Helvetica"><font class="Apple-style-span" size="4"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-size: 14px; "><span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: 19px; "><font class="Apple-style-span" face="Helvetica"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: normal; "><span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: 19px; font-family: Arial; "><span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: normal; "><font class="Apple-style-span" face="Helvetica"><font class="Apple-style-span" size="4"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-size: 14px; ">如何？<font class="Apple-style-span" size="4"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-size: 14px; ">Louis Armstrong （</span></font><span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: 19px; font-family: Arial; "><font class="Apple-style-span" face="Helvetica"><font class="Apple-style-span" size="4"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-size: 14px; ">露一手.臂壮</span></font></font><span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: normal; "><font class="Apple-style-span" face="Helvetica"><font class="Apple-style-span" size="4"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-size: 14px; ">）！“</span></font></font></span></span></span></font></font></span></span></span></font></span></span></font></font></span></span></span></font></span></span></font></span></font></span></span></font></font></span></span></span></font></span></p><p><font class="Apple-style-span" face="Helvetica"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: normal;">不错！也可以译成&nbsp;<font class="Apple-style-span" size="4"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-size: 14px; ">Louis Armstrong （搂妮</span></font><span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: 19px; font-family: Arial; "><font class="Apple-style-span" face="Helvetica"><font class="Apple-style-span" size="4"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-size: 14px; ">.臂壮</span></font></font><span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: normal; "><font class="Apple-style-span" face="Helvetica"><font class="Apple-style-span" size="4"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="font-size: 14px; ">）！！ 阿保</span></font></font></span></span></span></font></p><p><font class="Apple-style-span" face="Helvetica"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: normal;"><br></span></font></p><div><font class="Apple-style-span" face="Helvetica"><span class="Apple-style-span" style="line-height: normal;"><br></span></font></div></span>

喜欢《Am I That Easy to Forget》.

<P><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA"><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰">望湖楼主，</SPAN></SPAN></P> <P><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA"><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰">再补充一句，依俺看，您就属于阿Q那种，一见了女人就说“俺要跟你睡觉”的主儿。</SPAN></SPAN></P> <P><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA"><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰">--哈哈</SPAN></SPAN></P>

诗歌不可以象散文那样翻译，要力求忠于原文但又不能拘泥于细节，因为结构和韵律也同等重要。如果不考虑上下结构，一字一板地译，那连机器人也会做。重复和排比是基本修辞方式。＂红梅＂应该是＂红玫＂，已更正过，你没看见。阿保

<P><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA"><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰">望湖楼主,</SPAN></SPAN></P> <P><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA"><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰">您这要命的死脑筋，唉，叫俺咋说尼，没丁点革命浪漫主义色彩，如果都像您老人家这样，一板一眼，那要诗人干嘛？人家所谓诗人，就得别着劲，见了那树从不直接说树，见了花，也不单单说花，见了女人，更要拐个弯儿，要不天下的女人都去爱那八亿农民了，还有谁爱克林顿呢？</SPAN></SPAN></P> <P><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA"><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰">--哈哈</SPAN></SPAN></P>

<P><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: 19px"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: normal"><FONT class=Apple-style-span size=4><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="FONT-SIZE: 14px">TO 阿保：</SPAN></FONT></SPAN></FONT></SPAN></P> <P><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: 19px"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: normal"><FONT class=Apple-style-span size=4><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="FONT-SIZE: 14px">怎么只翻译下半段？</SPAN></FONT></SPAN></FONT></SPAN></P> <P><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: 19px"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: normal"><FONT class=Apple-style-span size=4><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="FONT-SIZE: 14px">Louis Armstrong （</SPAN></FONT><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: 19px; FONT-FAMILY: Arial"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><FONT class=Apple-style-span size=4><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="FONT-SIZE: 14px">路易.臂壮</SPAN></FONT></FONT><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: normal"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><FONT class=Apple-style-span size=4><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="FONT-SIZE: 14px">）？</SPAN></FONT></FONT></SPAN></SPAN></SPAN></FONT></SPAN></P> <P><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: 19px"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: normal"><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: 19px; FONT-FAMILY: Arial"><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: normal"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><FONT class=Apple-style-span size=4><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="FONT-SIZE: 14px"><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: 19px"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: normal"><FONT class=Apple-style-span size=4><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="FONT-SIZE: 14px">加上上半段<SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: 19px"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: normal"><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: 19px; FONT-FAMILY: Arial"><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: normal"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><FONT class=Apple-style-span size=4><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="FONT-SIZE: 14px"><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: 19px"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: normal"><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: 19px; FONT-FAMILY: Arial"><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: normal"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><FONT class=Apple-style-span size=4><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="FONT-SIZE: 14px">如何？</SPAN></FONT></FONT></SPAN></SPAN></SPAN></FONT></SPAN></SPAN></FONT></FONT></SPAN></SPAN></SPAN></FONT></SPAN></P></SPAN></FONT></SPAN></FONT></SPAN></SPAN></FONT></FONT></SPAN></SPAN></SPAN></FONT></SPAN> <P><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: 19px"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: normal"><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: 19px; FONT-FAMILY: Arial"><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: normal"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><FONT class=Apple-style-span size=4><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="FONT-SIZE: 14px"><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: 19px"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: normal"><FONT class=Apple-style-span size=4><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="FONT-SIZE: 14px">Louis Armstrong （</SPAN></FONT><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: 19px; FONT-FAMILY: Arial"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><FONT class=Apple-style-span size=4><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="FONT-SIZE: 14px">露一手.臂壮</SPAN></FONT></FONT><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: normal"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><FONT class=Apple-style-span size=4><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="FONT-SIZE: 14px">）！</SPAN></FONT></FONT></SPAN></SPAN></SPAN></FONT></SPAN></SPAN></FONT></FONT></SPAN></SPAN></SPAN></FONT></SPAN></P> <P><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: 19px"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: normal"><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: 19px; FONT-FAMILY: Arial"><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: normal"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><FONT class=Apple-style-span size=4><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="FONT-SIZE: 14px"><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: 19px"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: normal"><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: 19px; FONT-FAMILY: Arial"><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="LINE-HEIGHT: normal"><FONT class=Apple-style-span face=Helvetica><FONT class=Apple-style-span size=4><SPAN class=Apple-style-span style="FONT-SIZE: 14px"></SPAN></FONT></FONT></SPAN></SPAN></SPAN></FONT></SPAN></SPAN></FONT></FONT></SPAN></SPAN></SPAN></FONT></SPAN>&nbsp;</P>

<P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0in 0in 0pt; mso-layout-grid-align: none"><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰">亦凡博：</SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體"><?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = "urn:schemas-microsoft-com:office:office" /><o:p></o:p></SPAN></P> <P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0in 0in 0pt; mso-layout-grid-align: none"><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體"><o:p></o:p></SPAN></P> <P><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA">翻译的原则在于信、达、雅，如果不信不达，那是从新创作，和翻译无关。最少，你的翻译已达到信、达、雅。但是否无懈可击呢？也不是。“我看见树的翠绿和玫瑰的红艳。”这句话就罗嗦了，那两个要命的“的”字就不要了。要我，就是译成：“我看见绿树和红玫瑰。”</SPAN></P> <P><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰; mso-ansi-language: EN-US; mso-fareast-language: ZH-TW; mso-bidi-language: AR-SA"><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰">望湖楼主</SPAN></SPAN></P>

<P><FONT color=#000099><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰">望湖楼主,</SPAN></FONT></P> <P><FONT color=#000099><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰">你的笔名挺好听的，但你的意见不敢苟同，译个歌词，干嘛要咬文嚼字呢？依我看，你的翻译也不咋地。来个精彩的，给你们瞧瞧。--亦凡</SPAN></FONT></P> <P><FONT color=#000099>What a Wonderful World - 路易斯&#8231;阿姆斯壯 (Louis Armstrong)</FONT></P> <P><FONT color=#000099>I see trees are green, red roses, too<BR>我看見樹的翠綠和玫瑰的紅艷<BR>I see them bloom for me and you<BR>她們為你我而綻放<BR>And I think to myself<BR>我心中想著<BR>What a wonderful world<BR>多麼美好的世界啊</FONT></P> <P><FONT color=#000099>I see skies of blue and clouds of white<BR>我看到了藍天與白雲<BR>The bright blessed day<BR>明亮、幸福的一天<BR>The dark says good night<BR>夜晚向人們道晚安<BR>And I think to myself<BR>我心中想著<BR>What a wonderful world<BR>多麼美好的世界啊</FONT></P> <P><FONT color=#000099>The colors of the rainbow<BR>彩虹的顏色<BR>So pretty in the sky<BR>在天空中多麼美麗<BR>Are also on the faces of people going by<BR>那些過往的行人臉上也是<BR>I see friends shaking hands<BR>我看到朋友互相握手<BR>Saying "how do you do?"<BR>說著"最近好嗎？"<BR>They're really saying I love you<BR>他們是真心的愛著彼此</FONT></P> <P><FONT color=#000099>I hear babies cry, I watch them grow<BR>我聽著嬰兒哭泣，看著他們長大<BR>They learn much more<BR>他們學習著許多<BR>Than I'll never know<BR>我從不知道的事物<BR>And I think to myself<BR>我心中想著<BR>What a wonderful world <BR>多麼美好的世界啊</FONT></P> <P><FONT color=#000099></FONT>&nbsp;</P>

<P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0in 0in 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 19.2pt; mso-layout-grid-align: none"><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰">初到贵地，看到大家都客客气气地唱颂歌，互相吹捧，不敢苟同。所以，我对楼主的翻译提点不客气的意见：</SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: Helvetica"><?xml:namespace prefix = o ns = "urn:schemas-microsoft-com:office:office" /><o:p></o:p></SPAN></P> <P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0in 0in 0pt 0.5in; TEXT-INDENT: -0.25in; LINE-HEIGHT: 19.2pt; mso-layout-grid-align: none; tab-stops: .5in"><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰">第一句与其译成“红梅”，倒不如保持原意“红玫瑰”；</SPAN></P> <P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0in 0in 0pt 0.5in; TEXT-INDENT: -0.25in; LINE-HEIGHT: 19.2pt; mso-layout-grid-align: none; tab-stops: .5in"><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰"></SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: Arial">I see friends shakin' hands, sayin' "How do you do?"</SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: Helvetica"> </SPAN><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰">你译成“<SPAN style="mso-bidi-font-weight: bold">我看见</SPAN></SPAN></P> <P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0in 0in 0pt 0.5in; TEXT-INDENT: -0.25in; LINE-HEIGHT: 19.2pt; mso-layout-grid-align: none; tab-stops: .5in"><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰"><SPAN style="mso-bidi-font-weight: bold">朋友们握手问好寒暄”问好寒暄，意思重覆，写诗或译诗大忌。我以为仅用“问好”或“寒暄”就可以了。所以这句应改为：“我看见朋友们握手问好”或“我看见朋友们握手寒喧”；</SPAN></SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: Helvetica"><o:p></o:p></SPAN></P> <P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0in 0in 0pt 0.5in; TEXT-INDENT: -0.25in; LINE-HEIGHT: 19.2pt; mso-layout-grid-align: none; tab-stops: .5in"><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: Arial">They're really saying "I love you"</SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: Helvetica"> </SPAN><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰">这句是承接上一句的，意思是朋友们说</SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: Helvetica">"How do you do?" </SPAN><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰">，实际上是表达</SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: Helvetica">"I love you" </SPAN><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰">你把它译成：“<SPAN style="mso-bidi-font-weight: bold">他们在默默地说：我爱你永远。”就失去原意。两句合起来我以为应译成：“我看到朋友握手寒喧，在表达真情爱。”</SPAN></SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: Helvetica"><o:p></o:p></SPAN></P> <P style="LINE-HEIGHT: 12.5pt"><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: Arial">They'll learn much more than I'll ever know </SPAN><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰">，意思是说他们会学得比我懂的多。简单地说就是他们会学得比我多。你这句的翻译是百分之一百的错了。</SPAN></P> <P style="LINE-HEIGHT: 12.5pt"><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰">望湖楼主</SPAN></P> <P style="LINE-HEIGHT: 12.5pt"><SPAN lang=ZH-TW style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體; mso-bidi-font-family: 穝灿?砰"></SPAN><SPAN style="FONT-SIZE: 10pt; FONT-FAMILY: 新細明體"><o:p></o:p></SPAN>&nbsp;</P> <P class=MsoNormal style="MARGIN: 0in 0in 0pt; LINE-HEIGHT: 19.2pt; mso-layout-grid-align: none">&nbsp;</P>

这老黑虽没有隔壁的帅哥长的俊，可他的歌还是耐听，像一壶醇酒，散发出醉人的幽香。--歌迷

<P><STRONG>白玫瑰的译文，情深意长，有俺东北银的实在。</STRONG></P> <P><STRONG>--东北丽人</STRONG></P>

白妹妹这乡土作品貌俗品隽，咋能随便指教呢？ 阿保

<STRONG>46</STRONG>楼大哥，俺是农民，懂啥个韵脚，不行，你来一首带脚的，给俺们瞧瞧？-WR

白家大妹子啊，你发啥子个挥呀，瞧你这傻丫头把这曲儿给整的，咋哼不出半个韵脚儿捏，你咋有脸儿请人家阿保指教？

<P><STRONG>保哥哥的歌词译得太柔情似水了，俺看了之后，感动得痛哭流涕。</STRONG></P> <P><STRONG>相对比之下，俺之前的翻译太中规中矩，忠于原作了，现在也学阿保稍微发挥一下。这次，俺代表八亿中国农民，来个通俗点的，大家可以看得明白。</STRONG></P> <P>&nbsp;</P> <P><STRONG>&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp;&nbsp; <FONT color=#ff00ff>《难以忘掉》</FONT></STRONG></P> <P><STRONG><FONT color=#ff00ff></FONT></STRONG>&nbsp;</P> <P><STRONG><FONT color=#ff00ff>听说你又找到了新爱人</FONT></STRONG></P> <P><STRONG><FONT color=#ff00ff>可俺对你的爱还止不住</FONT></STRONG></P> <P><STRONG><FONT color=#ff00ff>难不成就这样撒手不管</FONT></STRONG></P> <P><STRONG><FONT color=#ff00ff>要命的是俺老是忘不掉</FONT></STRONG></P> <P><STRONG><FONT color=#ff00ff></FONT></STRONG>&nbsp;</P> <P><STRONG><FONT color=#ff00ff>俺也可以找到新的爱人</FONT></STRONG></P> <P><STRONG><FONT color=#ff00ff>可俺心里头只有你一个</FONT></STRONG></P> <P><STRONG><FONT color=#ff00ff>你咋能不打招呼就走了</FONT></STRONG></P> <P><STRONG><FONT color=#ff00ff>不通俺就那么容易忘掉</FONT></STRONG></P> <P><STRONG><FONT color=#ff00ff></FONT></STRONG>&nbsp;</P> <P><STRONG><FONT color=#ff00ff>走之前俺一定要闹明白</FONT></STRONG></P> <P><STRONG><FONT color=#ff00ff>到底你爱哪个爱人多点</FONT></STRONG></P> <P><STRONG><FONT color=#ff00ff>要是俺就那么容易忘掉</FONT></STRONG></P> <P><STRONG><FONT color=#ff00ff>就当咱们从没有那一手</FONT></STRONG></P> <P><STRONG><FONT color=#ff00ff></FONT></STRONG>&nbsp;</P> <P><STRONG>请阿保指教。</STRONG></P> <P><STRONG>--白玫瑰</STRONG></P> <P><FONT color=#ff00ff></FONT>&nbsp;</P>

首先谢亦凡指正，绝对应该是＂红玫遍地＂。至于最后两句的顺序问题，户人和白玫瑰都有道理。但是我沿用了后者的结构，一则因为白玫瑰的杰作本来已近乎完美，二则是按原文的语序译为中文好象太生硬。另外，这两句话实际是一个虚拟复给句，所以将句内的两个子句前后颠倒一下应该说理论上也无大错。翻译有时候不比原创容易，而诗歌就更难了，因为约束多，自由度少。这也只是我个人的原则而已，无它。阿保

<P><FONT size=4>请听小康妮Connie Talbot演唱的Wonderful World &nbsp;</FONT><FONT size=4><A href="http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U6n3XHL1uLI&amp;eurl=http%3A%2F%2Fblog%2Exuite%2Enet%2Fhw585818%2Fblog%2F23921210&amp;feature=player_embedded">http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U6n3XHL1uLI&amp;eurl=http%3A%2F%2Fblog%2Exuite%2Enet%2Fhw585818%2Fblog%2F23921210&amp;feature=player_embedded</A></FONT></P> <P><FONT size=4></FONT>&nbsp;</P>

<P>&nbsp;户人</P> <P>您说的也有道理.只是这样翻译,中文似乎就不畅通了.不过,这个问题值得商榷.</P> <P>阿保,你的意见呢?</P> <P>--白玫瑰</P>

<P>白玫瑰：</P> <P>你的英文原则没错。只是在唱歌时，每一行结束时都是要换气的吧？如果你用中文唱第三句，而实际在原文中是第四句的话，感觉上有点别扭。这只是户人之见。</P> <P>-- 户人<BR></P>

<P>户人，你应该知道中文和英文的区别，中文译文把“如果。。。“放在前面是对的。当然这只是俺个人的认为。</P> <P>阿保，你的译文太棒了，回头有时间复你俺的感受。</P> <P>--白玫瑰</P>